Journal #2 – cause/effect prewriting
Effects of reducing class size
I think if a school is reduced class size, a teacher can control easily the atmosphere of the class, and the teacher can discuss effectively with students in the class. For example, if there are a lot of students in the class, the teacher cannot control all of the students; also, the teacher cannot take care of each student. When I was in middle school, my teacher who was a woman could not control us because some students did not attention the teacher’s speaking. My teacher got tired because of them. Another example, they can discuss enjoy with teacher in the class because the teacher can lead the students, and the students speak well each other’s opinions. I think it is very effective discussion. Then, if the school is reduced class size, the school gets some effective things for students.
September 27th, 2007 at 3:31 pm
I think first sentence is very good.
I think you have a good structure, but you need to write example at last, not middle.
If you write a essay this topic, you need more examples.
September 27th, 2007 at 3:50 pm
the topic sentence is clear, maybe the cause is not enought for800 words’ essay.
your 2nd example is similar with the first one. I thought that would repeat.
October 1st, 2007 at 12:20 am
You choose good topic. Also your journal is interesting. Try to figure out how to write as essay.